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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think is a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays, the smartphone is an essential device in a juvenile’s everyday life. Teenagers spend a lot of
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 on it doing plenty of different
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 as chatting, surfing the internet, playing video games, studying and watching videos. Of the many different
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 you can do with these modern phones, there are some positive aspects and some drawbacks. In
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 on these devices, which are surely a positive development in modern society.
Smartphones
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 are mainly used to communicate. Almost all teenagers have installed
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 their
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 many social networks,
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, Whatsapp, Instagram, Facebook or Twitter. By using them, they can chat with their friends, publish new photos and discover new social trends.
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, they stay updated with the recent news and trends.
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, since the spread of the covid-19 pandemic,
smartphones
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 have been an essential requirement for school purposes. Students have followed lessons online through their phones, and have sent the homework to the teachers by taking photos of it. The more recent the phones were, the easier
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 to follow lessons
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them.
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, sometimes
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 are overused. They can become an addiction for youngsters, especially if they spend their
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 doing superfluous
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 as playing video games or watching useless videos. Indeed, social networks are sometimes misused. If you spend hours watching photos and videos of others, you will not achieve great results in other
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 as school or sport, because of the lack of
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, many of my peers use Instagram 3 hours a day on average,
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time
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 could be used to learn, study or read. In conclusion,
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 there are some drawbacks to the use of
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, overall
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 new development has certainly brought much more advantages, giving the possibility to have lessons in your bedroom or chat with friends that are far away from you. Especially now, with a pandemic
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 still running, their usage has never been so important.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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