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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #individuals #events #people #benefit
Not some
government
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governments
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 but almost every government does the same thing. I
am totally agree
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on
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with
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 investing some money
on
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in
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 the growth of an individual for the sake
on
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international
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the international
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 sport. So that they can make the
nation
 proud. But
on the other
hand
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 I must say that it should be in balance. I am not at all in the support of it, that you do have poverty in the
country
, people are facing the issues of employment, they hardly have food to eat, no education in the
country
,
instead
 of giving
a
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sight to the major topics you are only
intrested
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interested
 in making your
nation
 proud.
Country
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The country
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 need schools, hospitals, good education and health, employment and girl safety, rather paying
attention
 to these vital topics if you are paying
attention
 towards
such
 activities so
this
 is not justified at all. We need a government that
pay
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 equal
attention
to
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apply
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everywhere. Be its education, sports, health,
entrtainment
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entertainment
,
crime
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. The
attention
 should be equal.
This
 is my personal opinion access of
every thing
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everything
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 is bad, if you are paying 100%
attention
 to a single topic so the
second
 entity will effect and it will impact you too. If
public
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have
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chosen
choosen
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chosen
 you as PM so you have to live up to their expectation. Rather
putting
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 100%
attention
 to a single topic pay
attention
 to every sector and try to make the
nation
 proud in every
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field
feild
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field
. India is a golden bird,
its
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it's
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 the most diverse
country
 still we are one
Nation
,
I
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and I
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proud
on
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of
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 my
country
.
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