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Some people believe that children should be made disciplined by making them obey rules and do what their parents and teachers want them to do. Others, however, believe that those children who are controlled are not well prepared to tackle the challenges life brings to them. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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While some people believe
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 must be forced into good conduct, others argue that
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 might not be able to handle real-world challenges. I personally believe that
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 should not be limited to obeying
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 but be allowed to explore and face the world on their own.
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 essay discusses both perspectives. On the one hand, behaviour is an important aspect of one's personality.
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 values if inculcated at a young age cement themselves as pillars of a person's identity. Doing so allows
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 to be upcoming model citizens of a society and they barely budge off their values.
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 elegant conduct can be observed in
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 born and raised in the royal families of India.
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, forceful induction of good behaviour can lead to frustration which often causes a
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 to be repulsive. The habit of obeying
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 might not be beneficial when a person faces a situation or a challenge where one has to defy the
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. The
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 can become limited in the scope of his behavioural teachings and might not be able to cope with others in life.
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, the
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 of Mughal emperor Akbar was observed to have great behavioural traits
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 but failed to adapt once he was assigned the throne. In conclusion, while both sides of the debate are able to back their opinion sufficiently, I believe that
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 must be taught good behaviour without the use of
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. A
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 is able to learn more by observing and having real-world experiences.
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