Some criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are set free. Reasons and solutions

Some offenders are responsible for
further
commitment to crimes even when they are set free from society. It happens for a variety of reasons.
However
, solutions exist to solve
this
problem. I consider two factors are blame why a number of criminals tend to kill people after
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prison. The
first
reason is increasingly linked to an uncontrollable power of disgust and greed inside them that comes from an
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way of spreading the resources of the Earth ,and the style and place of upbringing. A good instance
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this
is Alexis Flores guy who killed almost five hundred people. If people listen carefully
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interview of
this
guy, they can feel the rise of bitterness and greed from a harsh childhood
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humanity inside
this
guy which clearly explains the reason behind the 500 casualties. Another contributing factor is
education
.
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is
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root of every evil. The shortage of
education
guides them to an inevitable mental breakdown which makes them not feel a part of society ,so they found killing someone as
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revenge
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humanity when they
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. The reason is that if one’s mind is programmed to commit a crime from early
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no force in the world can stop that but
education
.
Nevertheless
, steps can be taken to mitigate
this
problem. Serial killers can do prison
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to help society, itself. It would be better if the judges give
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sentence
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when it comes to serial killers.
This
action will not only help to
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cheap skyscrapers but
also
diminish the number of casualties.
For example
, the astonishing skyscrapers of China are built by prisoners,
this
is a country where victims of killers are less than average.
Furthermore
, it is hard to teach an old dog new tricks ,
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adequate
education
and psychology. The research on psychology named “Inside the criminals’ brains” depicts that even there is
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good in bad ,and with that
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they changed hundreds of criminals’ lives forever. To conclude, the problem of committing crime after release will not be solved unless they either worked
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a
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prison
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or are introduced to
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proper
education
with a combination of
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psychological help.
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