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Some people say that adverting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, advertising is an integral part of marketing so companies allocate a sizeable amount of money to producing effective commercials.
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 have different views about the efficiency of
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 argue that adverting is
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 an ordinary means that
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 do not care about it. While I personally believe that it is a powerful tool in convincing community members to buy certain
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 essay, both viewpoints will be discussed. On the one hand, many commentators claim that persuading individuals with
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 is not an effective way to increase customers.
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, individuals find propaganda really boring due to the fact that it is broadcasted frequently.
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,
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 are more likely to change the television channel when
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 begin. To exemplify, children are more likely to watch their favourite animations continuously. So they prefer watching movies recorded on CDs that have no announcements.
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, most
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 have a negative attitude to advertising because they think advertisers want to promote their sales without considering consumers’ real needs. From their standpoints, they intend to mislead them with catchy slogans and flashy
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 so as to fulfil producers’ goals. Introducing new
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, there are those, myself included, who subscribe to the view that advertising is a strong instrument in the marketing world. They maintain that advertisements help
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 have a reasonable choice as they provide useful information. It means that
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 can choose their desired
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 or services by watching different
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 and comparing them.
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, adverting makes markets more competitive. more precisely, prices will decrease and customers may gain a lot of profit in
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 try to get away from advertisements in order to make their own decision without any external interference, I personally believe that
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 are an efficient means by which
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 can find their potential needs. Family members should be aware of the merits and drawbacks of commercials to make the best purchases.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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