Some people think it would be better for large companies and industries to move regional areas outside large urban centers. Do you think advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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A certain segment of individuals
believes
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that socializing with office friends benefits you,
while
others prefer to compartmentalize office work and personal life. In my opinion, I believe it is good to have extended relationships with coworkers. The following paragraphs of
this
essay will analyze both sides
while
giving reasons for my opinion.
To begin
with, one of the significant factors that keep me believing my ideology is, that interrelationships with peers make it easy to do your job.
For example
, a recent social experiment done by a couple of Canadian scientists has discovered,that a person who has good social connections with their peers always finds ease in doing their job,
while
individuals who
are lacks
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in making connections always fail.
In addition
to
this
benefit, department socializing induces you with self-confident feelings, which is always good to have as it keeps you energetic
while
working. That said,
on the other hand
, there are some disadvantages to making friendships with coworkers after work.
For instance
, some people may take advantage of your weaknesses. A recent article published by the Sunday Observer revealed some actual incidents that happened in local office premises, where some of the employees have taken advantage of other employees after realizing their weak points.
Hence
, it is advisable not to share too many personal things.
To conclude
, even though there are some disadvantages of making extended relationships with your peers, like taking advantage of a vulnerability, I reiterate it is better if you can make wider friendships with coworkers as it will ease your task and as well it will induce positive feelings in your mind which makes you comfortable to perform in your own territory.
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task response
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and the writer's opinion. Include a clear thesis statement.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the essay with clear paragraph structure and use linking words to connect ideas. Ensure that the conclusion restates the writer's opinion and summarizes the main points.
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