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Some people think it is important to construct new buildings rather than wasting money maintaining the old ones. To what extent, do you disagree or agree with this opinion?

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Since the beginning of industrialization, the pace of construction of new
buildings
 has been astounding. Yet, some people believe that it is better to build new structures
instead
 of spending money to restore those already existing. In
this
 essay, I will assess both views and I will outline the reasons why it is better to maintain the old
buildings
. In developed countries, metropolises are massive
cities
,
therefore
 expanding them
further
 without
first
 trying to restore the already existing
buildings
 would result in a rise in
pollution
. In fact, if people live far from the centre, the time spent commuting is higher,
consequently
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 the
pollution
 is more. Building new edifices requires more bricks, steel, energy and water.
Therefore
 it is not sustainable.
In addition
 to the increase in
pollution
, if the
cities
 are bigger, the time spent moving across the
cities
 is higher. Nowadays, there are already a lot of issues regarding traffic jams in big
cities
such
 as Los Angeles or Las Vegas. In conclusion,
although
 it might seem better to construct new, modern
buildings
, it is worse from every point of view, among them:
pollution
 and quality of life are the majors. For the future sustainability of the world, the best option is to use all the spaces that are already available
instead
 of creating new ones
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