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Some people prefer renting than buying a home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a house?

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In recent times, most
people
 decide to rent houses
instead
 of purchase residence, the main advantage is that it would help to positively the society's economy and the main drawback  is that
people
 cannot transform living place, in
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, 
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 generation consider renting
home
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a home
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 because it has common benefits,
contribute
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 to us, the main benefit is that the community can avoid tax payment because it would help to enhance
people
's economy if buy
a
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 own
home
people
 must pay house and land tax
nevertheless
 renting a house not pressuring the community economy,
therefore
,
people
 only have to pay on electricity gas and water bills to rented
home
For instance
, in the developed world that a prominent number of population live in
rented
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home
's
furthermore
, another merit is that
people
 could change places anytime if they need because
people
 can ageist short-distance travel from working places to
home
as a result
, it would aid to time management and
people
 work become so easier.
On the other hand
, the main disadvantage of
this
 phenomenon is that renting a
property
not
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 a long-term investment but owing a
property
 has positive
aspect
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 if needed money can mortgage a
property
 or sell whatever you want but renters do not have
this
 opportunity, renters are not allowed to modify the
property
 that way, it would affect
people
's their day-to-day life,
for example
, if they would like to paint a room blue colour they can do nothing
moreover
, another negative aspect is that
people
 must pay on rent the due date if not it would affect their renting history
then
home
 renters do not approve to rent residencies if broke something in
house
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 that
people
 have to pay a huge amount of money. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic, renting residents has several merits and disadvantages, owing a
home
also
 plays a vital role in its society, it can enforce the right method before implementing it.
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