Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

Nowadays, it is true that some
nations
import
tremendous numbers of
food
from other
nations
, and
can
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have some negative effects, including not only economic affect, but
also
environmental impact, yet it would be a wise deal with some
society
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issues,
such
as
food
shortage and
environment
protection In
this
essay,
i
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will analyse that whether it is a positive trend or not. People
opposed
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who opposed
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this
phenomenon
highlight
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highlights
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the economic effects for which
import
food
from foreign
nations
. In detail, since the government increase the amount of
food
import
, government expenditure and money out-flow ( domestic money transfer
to
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abroad), implying the GDP of the country would
be
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decline
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declined
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.
Therefore
, the domestic economy will experience a fluctuation and sometimes a decrease
instead
of increasing.
Furthermore
, the transportation of
food
is a huge problem.
Majority
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The majority
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of
food
is delivered by
vessels
, and due to the limited level of technology, the power of
vessels
are
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is
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offered by fossil fuel. It is inevitable for
this
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these
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fossil
fuel -powered
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fuel-powered
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vessels
release
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to release
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carbon dioxide, and in some harsh
situation
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situations
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like
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a storm
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storm
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storms
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,
leading
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lead
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to the sinking of
vessels
and leakage of fossil fuel.
Although
it
is not happen
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does not happen
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frequently, the Eco-system will be disturbed by
this
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these
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occasional events indeed.
Nevertheless
, it can not
denied
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that the
import
of
food
bring
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brings
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several benefits in terms of society and
environment
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the environment
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.
Firstly
, some
nations
situated
in
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on
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the equator encounter some natural disasters frequently,
for example
, drought and acid rain, and the local farm can be destroyed by
this
, resulting
food
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in food
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shortage. Fortunately, importing
food
can address
this
food
perfectly. Meanwhile,
the
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apply
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farming will occupy
the
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colossal areas of
country
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the country
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. To do
this
, the area
used
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to be forest will be replaced by cropland. Diminishing
forest
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forests
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could really harmful
for
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to
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environment
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the environment
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and
food
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the food
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chain. So,
food
import
would be meaningful and beneficial. In conclusion,
nor
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will
food
import
solely carry merits or demerits
.
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It is a trend
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that bring
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bring
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brings
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benefits,
for instance
, solving
food
shortage and
environment
preserving
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preservation
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, but
also
drawbacks,
for example
, economic trap and Eco-system disturbance.
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