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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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Nowadays, it is true that some
nations
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import
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 tremendous numbers of
food
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 from other
nations
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, and
can
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this can
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 have some negative effects, including not only economic affect, but
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 environmental impact, yet it would be a wise deal with some
society
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social
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 issues,
such
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 as
food
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 shortage and
environment
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 protection In
this
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 essay,
i
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 will analyse that whether it is a positive trend or not. People
opposed
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who opposed
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this
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 phenomenon
highlight
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 the economic effects for which
import
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food
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 from foreign
nations
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. In detail, since the government increase the amount of
food
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import
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, government expenditure and money out-flow ( domestic money transfer
to
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apply
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abroad), implying the GDP of the country would
be
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apply
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decline
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declined
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.
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, the domestic economy will experience a fluctuation and sometimes a decrease
instead
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 of increasing.
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, the transportation of
food
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 is a huge problem.
Majority
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The majority
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 of
food
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 is delivered by
vessels
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, and due to the limited level of technology, the power of
vessels
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are
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is
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 offered by fossil fuel. It is inevitable for
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this
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these
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 fossil
fuel -powered
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fuel-powered
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vessels
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release
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to release
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 carbon dioxide, and in some harsh
situation
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situations
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 like
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a storm
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storm
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storms
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,
leading
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lead
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 to the sinking of
vessels
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 and leakage of fossil fuel.
Although
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is not happen
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does not happen
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 frequently, the Eco-system will be disturbed by
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this
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these
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 occasional events indeed.
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, it can not
denied
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be denied
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 that the
import
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 of
food
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bring
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brings
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 several benefits in terms of society and
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environment
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the environment
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.
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, some
nations
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 situated
in
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on
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 the equator encounter some natural disasters frequently,
for example
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, drought and acid rain, and the local farm can be destroyed by
this
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, resulting
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food
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in food
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 shortage. Fortunately, importing
food
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 can address
this
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food
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 perfectly. Meanwhile,
the
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apply
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farming will occupy
the
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apply
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colossal areas of
country
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the country
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. To do
this
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, the area
used
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that used
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 to be forest will be replaced by cropland. Diminishing
forest
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forests
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 could really harmful
for
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to
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environment
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the environment
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 and
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food
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the food
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 chain. So,
food
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import
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 would be meaningful and beneficial. In conclusion,
nor
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apply
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will
food
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import
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 solely carry merits or demerits
.
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?
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 It is a trend
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that bring
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bring
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brings
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 benefits,
for instance
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, solving
food
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 shortage and
environment
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preserving
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preservation
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, but
also
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 drawbacks,
for example
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, economic trap and Eco-system disturbance.
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