Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Youngsters making their own decisions has become a controversial issue. It is said that some fraction of
populace
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feel that allowing
children
choose
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what they like in terms of fashion, food, and entertainment might lead to a world full of selfish people. While several others think it is necessary to allow them
decide
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on what is best for them. Despite debates on
this
topic, there are valid points on both sides.
However
, I believe
children
should be allowed to make their own choice and I will discuss
reasons
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for my stance in
this
essay. On one hand,
life
is not a bed of roses, giving
children
the freedom to decide on their own accord could make them feel that
life
is filled with milk and honey,
in other
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it is either their way or no way at all.
For
instance
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when my cousin was little she was given a free hand to make a
time table
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timetable
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of what she would like to eat during the week, she turned her freedom
it
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apply
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into a
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lifestyle
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life style
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. Now, she can never eat
same
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food more than once a week, even during a period where she might not be financially stable.
In contrast
, in my view, allowing them
choose
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for themselves, might perhaps give them a sense of taste and style. It can make them become more bold and decisive in what they want which is a skill one need to have in
life
.
In addition
, they can know their likes and dislikes.
For example
, my cousin has
an
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impeccable
tastes
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due to
freedom
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the freedom
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of choice given to her by her parents, she is able to navigate
life
knowing what she likes and what she does not like. In conclusion, a few people
thinking
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letting
children
make their own choice could make them selfish, while others think it can make them independent. In my
opinion
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I believe allowing them decide for themselves can make them
self supporting
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in their everyday lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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