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Wild animals have no place in 21st century ,so protecting them is a waste of resource to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Wild life
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Wildlife
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 is in danger in the century. Protecting it demands
huge
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a huge
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 sum of money .
However
, in my
opinion
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 wild animals are
integral
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an integral
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 part of
life
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the life
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 cycle.
In
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one
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the one
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 hand , zoologists indicate that there is
tight
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a tight
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connection
connetion
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connection
 between
variety
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species
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of species
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 of
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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 directly and indirectly. Indeed, animals and
plans
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plants
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 provide biodiversity of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 and they
freast
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feast
 on their own smaller ones.
Moreover
, deletion in one particular animal leads to
loss
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the loss
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 of numerous
of
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others. Needless to say that we have been providing
main
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 source of nutrition by meat or its products. Considering that we have to seek the input of experts to help us create
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method
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methods
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 for getting our meals done.
On the other hand
, some people are arguing that to avoid
extention
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extension
 we must devote resources including human resources, energy supply and conservation
area
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.
Although
 we are aware of the
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weakness
weaknesses
weaknees
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weaknesses
 of
scare
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scarce
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 species owing to the point that the smaller a population gets, the more potential they have to eradicate by catastrophes and water
shortage
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shortages
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,
disease
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and disease
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 resistance. To sum up,
although
 there is substantial opposition to the concept we do have to keep
it
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in mind loss of
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wildlife
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wild life
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wildlife
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 means
destruction
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the destruction
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 of other
specious
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species
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.
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