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The education of young people is highly prioritized in many countries. However, educating adults who cannot write or read is even more important and governments should spend more money on this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people are having different views about studying, Few think it is compulsory that youth must be literate, and few citizens think
that mature people
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 should get an
education
 for those who don't have basic reading and writing knowledge.In my ,view I am supporting both ideas as we cannot divide literacy in terms of defined age. In
this
 ,
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essay I am explaining both views of advantages. In the
first
word
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, we all know, how much
education
 is a must for everyone.
Education
 for youth people makes a better workplace and environment.
Education
 gives the knowledge to rise the economic condition of any
nation
. The
second
, investing money in
education
 is just work for the future prosperity of the
nation
. From another perspective, youth who have more educated can provide more resources to support their children.
As a result
,
this
 trend can lead to a sustainable way of national development.
On the other hand
, providing
education
 to illiterate matured
also
 plays an important role to grow any
nation
's development. It is not only we providing basic knowledge to adults but contributing to social equality. Which creates a modern and great society for your betterment. They will not depend on anyone in terms of basic understanding of words.
This
 creates self-awareness inside them. In conclusion, I believe according to the above reasons. I value the young generation and
education
 as well as illiterate matured learning equally considering both views can lead our
nation
's development.
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