You have recently moved to a different city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: - Explain why you decided to move to a different city -Describe the new city and accommodation -Ask your friend to arrange a visit
Dear Ruth,
I hope you are doing well in your city. I would like to apologise because I have not talked to you these past few weeks because I was preparing something and I am writing
this
letter to tell you what happened.
Firstly
, I am so excited to tell you that my mom was promoted in her work. Hence
, this
requires me to move with my mom because she is put in another workplace. I am so fascinated to stroll around and look for information about the High School in Makassar.
This
city is so great, there are many places to visit, friendly
neighbours, and it is so easy to commute everywhere because there are online drivers provided to the residents through an application. Correct word choice
and friendly
Moreover
, we choose to live in the flat because we want to feel another experience. This
apartment is so homey and there is a balcony inside so I can spend my leisure time there.
I am really hoping to see you this
Summer, please let me know the date you are available to visit here.
Yours sincerely,
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Task Achievement
To improve the task response, make sure to more explicitly address all three points in the prompt. Try to elaborate more on why you decided to move beyond just stating your mother's job promotion, describe in more detail the new city and your accommodations, and make your invitation for a visit more detailed and engaging.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, focus on connecting ideas more smoothly within and across paragraphs. Using transition phrases can help guide the reader through your narrative more seamlessly. Ensure each paragraph flows logically to the next, with clear topic sentences that introduce each paragraph's main idea.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal and nicely convey a sense of warmth and friendship, which fits the tone of a letter to a friend. Consider adding a brief friendly enquiry about your friend's wellbeing or an update on your life in the opening paragraph to enhance the engagement.