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At the present, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this stiuation outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the advance of urban development, more and more young population choose to move from rural into
city
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the city
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. Recently, the
people
 of some nations
involving
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an amount
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 of young adults, compared with the older group. In my concept, the benefits are more than
drawbacks
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 in
this
 situation There are some advantages, Among these, there are two benefits. One is that it has
higher
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labor
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 population. Approximately, the normal can bring numbers of economical than the old
people
 because of the ability of action.
This
 ability even
effects
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 the city or
country
's development.
Additionally
, it is helpful for
the
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developing city due to young
people
 have more innovative than
the
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older.
However
, there are a little of
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disadvantages
disdavantages
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disadvantages
, if the place which is helpful to get
profession
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a profession
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, the young
people
 will want to leave
original
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 hometown into high technology
country
 to live. And,
this
 situation cause other
nation
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have
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 too many old
people
 to afford.
Moreover
, it probably
make
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 the
country
 which has a lot of old
people
 improve moderately.
For instance
, the young population usually leave their
country
 to some high develop nation to get
job
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 in
southern
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the southern
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 area or southern eastern
fild
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field
. In their hometown, the older residents accumulate more and more In some countries, whether the young
people
 or not is a coin
have
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 two
side
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.
Nevertheless
, I still think the advantages of
this
 part
overheigh
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overweigh
overweight
overheight
 the disadvantages.
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