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The use of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

#media #facebook #twitter #contact #century #trend
Social
media
 has
revolutionzed
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revolutionized
 the way
people
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geographical distance. Many
people
 believe that
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social
media
 has largely supplanted
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traditional
face to face
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 interpersonal
communical
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communicate
 skills. I fully agree with
this
 view though I concede the
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advantages
adavantages
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advantages
 of social
media
 for entrepreneurs. Social
media
 is a boon for someone who wants to start a business venture. In the past, it was more difficult that they didn't have
much
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 avenues and
also
 must have inherited money to start running a business, but nowadays due to the advent of apps like Facebook,Instagram,Twitter and TikTok where we can publish our idea and get sponsors. These apps
also
 open up
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possibilities
possibilties
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possibilities
 for content creators who
wants
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 to connect with their audience around the globe.
For example
, Justin Beiber was once a social
media
 sensation,
his
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 life transformed from relative obscurity to global stardom.
In addition
 to
this
,
YoutTube
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YouTube
 pays a
lumsum
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lumpsum
lump sum
 amount for these digital creators if they have huge followers, there are other modest examples in each and every corner who has used social
media
 to make a living. Despite the aforementioned advantages, social
media
 has degraded the quality of communication,
people
 find it difficult to socialize. Younger ones are the most affected. In school, children and teenagers involve in friendly banter, arguing about their personal and political views
this
 would gradually lead them to compelling speakers, good
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storytellers
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story tellers
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 and some others end up being good
oerators
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operators
orators
.
In contrast
, due to
presence
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 of social
media
,
people
 are substituting regular communication with digital
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conversation
converstaion
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conversation
 due to
this
 their literacy skills
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 affected as they use informal messages with several emojis. In
longer
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 term,
this
 would make
people
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 from their communities,
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which
whick
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which
 will lead to social isolation and
lack
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a lack
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 of interpersonal skills. In conclusion, there is no deniable fact that social
media
 has hurt
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regular communication overshadowing
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economic utility.
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Parent
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 ought to limit
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phone use for children and themselves in order to fight against the growing technological influence that humanity is not evolved to handle
responsible
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