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The use of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages

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 has revolutionized the way
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 connect with one another,regardless of geographical distance. Many
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 believe that social
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 has largely supplanted traditional face-to-face interpersonal
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 skills. I fully agree with
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 view though I concede the advantages of social
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 for entrepreneurs. Social
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 is a boon for someone who wants to start a business venture. In the past, it was more challenging because they did not have many avenues and
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 should have a prerequisite of inherited money to outset a business, but nowadays due to the advent of apps like Facebook,Instagram,Twitter and TikTok where we can publish our own ideas and get sponsors to kick-off. These apps
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 open up possibilities for content creators who want to connect with their audience around the globe.
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, Justin Beiber was once a social
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 sensation, and his life completely transformed from relative obscurity to global stardom.
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, YouTube pays an enormous amount for these digital creators if they have massive followers, there are
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 other modest examples in each and every corner who has used social
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 to make a living. Despite the aforementioned advantages, social
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 has degraded the quality of
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,
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 find it difficult to socialize.Younger ones are the most affected. In school, children and teenagers involve in friendly banter, arguing about their personal and political views
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 would gradually lead them to compelling speakers, and good storytellers and the rest of the masses end up being excellent orators.
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, due to the presence of social
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,
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 are substituting regular
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 with digital conversation due to
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 their literacy skills get affected as they use informal messages with several emoticons. In the longer term,
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 would make
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 alienated from their communities, which will lead to social isolation and a lack of interpersonal skills. In conclusion, there is no deniable fact that social
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 has hurt regular
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 overshadowing economic utility. Parents ought to limit phone use for children and themselves in order to fight against the growing technological influence that humanity is not evolved to handle responsibly.
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