At the present time, the populatiom of some countries includes a reltaively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. do the advantage of this situation outweight disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the majority of several country's residents are youth and the minority are elders. I consider
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has more advantages than disadvantages for several reasons. On the one hand, nations that have adults more than old people may suffer from many drawbacks like
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high unemployment rates ,and
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labour market.
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, in
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there are enormous
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university
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graduates every year who suffer from
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of vacancies and work
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opportunities
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opportunities
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number of them.
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, few elders in societies may result in
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of experiences transferred between generations, so that youth can not learn from the experienced older generations and make more mistakes through their professional
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due to the absence of guidance and
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consultations
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from the older ones.
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, I believe that the presence of
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number of adults in nations
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more positive outcomes because it will increase the productivity, innovation,
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of the society.
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, if the majority of the habitats are from young ages,
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will lead to higher rates of production, manufacturing, and
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the cities.
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, schools and
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university
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university
graduates are able to innovate, create, and invent new ideas and projects compared to elderly people.
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, at Google, Apple, and Microsoft the majority of the
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employees
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employees
are fresh graduates to create products suitable for their generation and the present demands.
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, the low number of older ages, means that the government do not have to pay huge amount of pensions and medications,
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it will invest its money in projects for future generations. In conclusion, I hold the notion that the higher youth rates are more
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preferrable
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to increase the productivity, creativity,success, and innovation of societies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic shift
  • workforce participation
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • vocational training
  • dependency ratio
  • healthcare resources
  • unemployment rate
  • social dynamics
  • cultural vibrancy
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