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In the past, when students did a , they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the
last
 few years,
students
 had more opportunities to attend foreign universities .
On the contrary
,
students
 in the past were admitted to universities in their hometowns for higher education. In my opinion, the positives outshine the drawbacks of studying abroad. In
this
 essay, I am going to elaborate on the upsides of studying in a foreign country.
To begin
 with, pupils who moved to abroad continue their education are more capable of self-independent because they have to manage everything on their own when they are living in a different country without their parent's assistance.
For example
,
students
 who study in England or US, prefer to cook by themselves, due to the high-sky cost of living, making food on their own will be more economical.
Therefore
, it makes them more responsible and has a better chance to be hired by top companies.
Secondly
, international
students
 have greater opportunities to share the classes with pupils from diverse nations, so that they have more chances to interact with foreign
students
.
Thus
, it develops the ability of
students
 to communicate fluently in a foreign language and makes them easier to work in a multicultural workplace. In conclusion, studying abroad can not only make
students
 stronger and live independently but
also
 become capable of exchanging ideas with people in diverse countries.
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