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Some people argue that the government should spend money only on medical care and education but not on theaters or sports stadiums. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #money #care #education #theaters #sports #stadiums
One of the major
problem
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 of our society is how the
government
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to decide
 spend
money
.In the
last
 year some research
show
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 us ,
the
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 population is uncertain about the
government
 spending
money
 in the right way.Almost part is a
truly
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 believers in the fact the
government
 may spend more fond on
education
 and
medical
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the medical
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 system.
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 the opposite ,trends
another
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 category shows us entertainment like sport event or theatre have to lose some
founds
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funds
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 allocate to them.,Personally
i
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agree
toagree
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to agree
agree
 with the fact the
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government
gouvernament
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government
 has to use more
money
 on health and
education
 because these two aspects
,
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 are well known around the world is the foundation for the future of one nation. In the medical ,
sistem
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system
 the
government
 must allocate more found for medical
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system
sistem
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systems
for example
 training
the
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specialists in cardiology.I truly believe is the
government
 should spend capital
in
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on
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 medical systems in training
no
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not
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in
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the
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infrastructure.
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the
government
 should
to
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build a strong medical university for the future of the people's health. Another aspect
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wich
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which
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i
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 think is crucial for our society is
education
 ,the
government
 has to
restriction
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 the
education
 to form well the future students
i
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 mean ,the students
whose
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who
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 oriented to art
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to have
tohave
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to have
 go
in
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to
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art school,
i
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 mean the high school teenager have to study the most part the subject which interested in.Another aspect very important is the
government
 have to create a program which
help
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family
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the family
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 with
financial
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 issue,those children have to complete their study.In my ,opinion if the population have
money
 to spend on children's
education
 the rate of illiteracy will decrease.
In
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 the most part of the aspect
generally
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i
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 think is a better option to invest in our
children
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children's
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education
eduation
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education
 and in the medical system.If the population is healthy and educated will produce more
mone
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money
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