Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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I DISAGREE Nowadays, football is the most popular game in the world. We can find there are many different teams who plays

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football. There are dividing into 3

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and

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three. Each divisions have different skills. The skills that they have are depend on the manager. He is the

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who teachs the player how to play. By playing football, there are many advantages and

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, the team can earn a

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of money. If we compare the income in

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and

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are really different. The

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will get more than

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. Because as we know, the team in

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, they shows to the people that they are able to play better than the others.

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: David Beckham (the player of Manchaster United). He can earn for about £45.000 £50.000/week. It’s unbelievable. Even the prime minister in the UK just got for about £11O.OOO/

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, they can get a

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of spectators which makes the income increased. In

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match, they can earn for about 20 or 30 million pounds. Actually, it’s really high. For

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ticket (VIP) it can cost us a

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of money. I think for about £100 or over.

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person. How if we count for a million person? There are

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many

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: like from the task which says that the releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Actually, I don’t really agree about that: like 2 weeks or 3 weeks ago, there are 2 fans of Leeds United got shots. And it makes them died. Many people come and give them flowers and

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the clothes which shown they’re sad about that. There are other sport games like

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Tennis

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popular. In playing

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there are

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have advantages and

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games shows how they against each other. The advantages are can earn a

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of money, can attract the spectators (audience). There are

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have

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games,

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years ago, when

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and Steffi Graph are on the match. They play against each other

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of the Steffi’s fan can’t stand anymore, he killed (shots)

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. That makes

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have to stop the game. The people are all thinking to take her to the hospital. Because of that, it makes

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stopped from playing

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for about a

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. But now, she has started again. In my opinion, these sport can ease the international tensions and

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can make death from

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become increase. So, it is very dangerous.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood

The plans below show a public Park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?

Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in team sports, like football. While other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, young children are looked after by other people while parents go out to work. Is it a good thing or a bad thing?