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Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

These days,
people
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 can purchase any
kinds
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kind
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 of
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foods
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food
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 from supermarkets
with
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at
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 affordable
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price
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prices
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.
This
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 is because our economy is getting more and more globalized and industrialized. So, the owner of supermarkets can import demanded food from other
countries
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in
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at
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cheaper
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a cheeper
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cheeper
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cheaper
price
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 compared to locally provided
foods
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. In my opinion,
this
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 is
positive
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 development for
consumers
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 because of two reasons. To start with, some vegetables and fruits are difficult to grow up in cold weather, so the
quality
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 of these goods
are
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 worse in some
countries
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.
For instance
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, in
Japan
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,Japan
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 we are relying on importing a specific fruit which is
banana
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bananas
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 from
Philippines
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the Philippines
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. Generally banana is a kind of tropical
fruits
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fruit
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, so it is easy to cultivate in tropical islands like
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Indonesia.
However
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, it doesn’t grow up in Japan because the temperature is quite cold during
winter
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the winter
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 season. The
quality
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 of
banana
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bananas
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 is better in tropical islands because
it
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they
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 absorb enough ultra violate during day time and superb
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nutrition
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nutritions
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nutrition
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 from
jungle
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the jungle
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for
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in
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an
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entire
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an entire
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 year.
Therefore
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, importing better
quality
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foods
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 from other
country
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countries
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 is
good
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a good
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 development because
consumers
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 can taste the
high
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high-quality
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quality
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foods
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 that they used not
to try
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 before.
Secondly
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,
consumers
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 take the advantage of
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cheaper
cheeper
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cheaper
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price
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prices
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 for imported
foods
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 compare to locally
produced
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onesproduced
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.
For example
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, there
are
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 not enough land for growing up
lemon
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 in Japan, so
total
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the total
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 amount of cultivation is small and the
price
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 will
be
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is
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 higher
compare
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compared
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 to the imported one.
As a result
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 of
technology
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 improvement, cultivation cost is extremely
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cheaper
cheap
cheeper
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cheaper
 in other
countries
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.
Moreover
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, there are gigantic land and stable temperature in Mexico so
people
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in
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apply
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there can cultivate
large
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a large
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amount
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amounts
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 of
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lemon
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lemons
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 efficiently. In fact, the
price
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 of imported
lemon
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 is almost half
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price
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the price
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 of Japanese
lemon
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.
Thus
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,
consumers
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 can buy the same food
with
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at
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cheaper
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a cheeper
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cheeper
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cheaper
price
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for
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than
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 the imported one. In conclusion, buying imported products from other
country
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countries
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 is
beneficial
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a beneficial
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 development for
consumers
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. As I mentioned above, importing
foods
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 from other
countries
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 is beneficial
in
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apply
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economically and
people
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 can get better
quality
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foods
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 too. So,
the
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apply
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globalization is
positive
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a positive
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 influence
for
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on
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people
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • imported
  • local
  • supermarkets
  • products
  • variety
  • trade
  • demand
  • availability
  • prices
  • consumer
  • fruits
  • vegetables
  • services
  • global
  • brands
  • choices
  • development
  • habits
  • benefits
  • cuisines
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