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Stress-related illness are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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modern
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 era, people have jobs
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 their life.
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It
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Tt
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 could be seen that since early morning the
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people
peopole
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people
 started to
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prepare
preapare
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their self
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themself
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such
 as shoes,
shirt
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shirts
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,
bag
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, etc. The people tried to
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prepare
prepeare
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 everything but they forgot to think about their
healthy
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.
That is
 why
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sometime
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 they were getting
stress
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.
Stress
 is one of the signs of your body
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 to be relaxed. Many causes of
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stress
. Mostly, it
caused
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 by job and
household's
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problem
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. The
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routine
rutine
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routine
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energy
of
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 your body after you did a long day.
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, you need to get additional time to finish your task and make you go back
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home
in
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the
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late
night
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. On another hand, after you go back
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home, you will face
daily
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the daily
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problem
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problems
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. Usually, it
relate
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 to the children, parents, wife,
husband
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and husband
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. According to the WHO,
stress
 can be overcome by doing
positive
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the positive
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activity
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activities
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. Sport is one
the
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 many options you can do
it
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in
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 the weekend. It will refresh your body and brain. Another thing is doing
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a hobby
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hobby
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hobbies
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.
Hobby
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 is
also
 one
the
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 best ways to restart our
mind
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minds
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. It will make you feel happy and release
stress
. Indeed,
stress
-related
illness
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illnesses
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 are becoming increasingly common.
However
, it could be organized by doing positive activities. So, step by step, it will overcome
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stress
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the stess
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stess
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stress
which
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faced by people in the
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world
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.
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