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Most countries believe that international tourism has harmful effects. What problems are caused by international tourism? Solutions to change negative attitudes?

#countries #tourism #effects #change #attitudes
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In the shrinking process, international travel destinations
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 been grabbing a colossal influx of foreign visitors on
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 annual basis,
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; the rise of international tourism has an adverse effect on many aspects of life. In
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 essay, I will present the reasons why local residents do not have a good impression
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 foreign
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 and put forward some solutions to
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all, the influx of international
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 is often attached to environmental degradation. It is undeniable fact that many
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 tourist destinations over the world
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 been exerted an enormous deterioration from the non-biodegradable waste and emissions that foreign
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 emit due to the scarcity of awareness of environmental conservation, which leaves a massive carbon footprint on other countries annually.
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, it is possible for international tourism to undermine public health security in light
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that foreign visitors can
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risk carrying pathogens from their home country to other countries. Typically,
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 covid 19 pandemic, many residents around the world have contracted covid 19 after
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having
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physical exposure
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 the Chinese, which has given rise to
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irreversible impairment
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 the whole world , namely human health.
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, there are many feasible approaches to address
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 problem. The
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 approach is that the government should launch environmental campaigns to raise the consciousness of foreign
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 when they set foot on new lands by imposing strict penalties on
tourists
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, typically as fines,
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 confiscation.
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,
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 should be encouraged to use public transport
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 as buses to alleviate emissions into the environment. The
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 remedy is that the government should place emphasis on public health safety by conducting general medical checks for foreign
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 to halt epidemics from
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 countries. In sum, There is a school of negative
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 about international tourism that
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 still being sparked.
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 can be attacked by taking the aforementioned hints.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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