some people believe that university should offer places for people with high marks, others says that universities accept all age of people even if they do not do well at school. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many argue that higher
education
institutions
should choose those with top academic achievements as their
students
. While other
people
contend that
education
institutions
have to give chances to
people
who do not record good marks in their previous educations, I believe that all
people
regardless of their academic statistics should have equal rights to get into any
universities
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. On the one hand, I can understand why
universities
are inclined to implement an enrolment selection based on marks.
This
aims to ensure that prospective
students
are eligible to meet the certain standard established by the university that will affect the output of the institution’s achievements in the future.
For example
,
top tier
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universities
like Harvard and Standford have stipulated clear
admission’s
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criteria for
students
that want to get into the
institutions
,
revealed
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by the high score demand on GRE exam
result
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. By doing
this
, those
universities
would assure that they accept proper
students
that can follow their learning systems and
also
contribute
for
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higher
university’s
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achievements.
On the other hand
, the
second
argument is
also
important to be discussed, since the high enrolment standards implemented by
universities
since
confine
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many
people
who do not have good academic records to gain chances
entering
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higher
education
institution
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.
However
, it should
bears
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remembering
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that gaining
education
access, including
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to get accepted
in
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universities
, is part of fundamental human rights.
Further
, it can
also
affect the
widen
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of inequality in society when it is solely
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the view
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view
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of
people
who can study in higher
education
institutions
.
For example
, the main reason why emerging countries are difficult to
vying
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with developed countries in
term
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of economics is due to the lower
ration
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ratio
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of citizens
graduated
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from
universities
. In conclusion, there are plausible reasons why several
people
assume that
university
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should be focused on receiving admissions from bright
students
rather than lower-gained academic records.
Nevertheless
, personally, I think every
people
notwithstanding their marks should obtain
an
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equal access to higher
education
.
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