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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In recent years, reading online has become more popular thanks to the widespread use of the
internet
. Some
people
 believe that
this
 revolution may lead to replacing free online press with printed ones in the
next
 years.
However
, I personally agree with
this
 claim to some extent because of the reasons that will be discussed in
this
 essay. On the one hand, many commentators justifiably argue that reading books and newspapers through the
Internet
have
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 some merits.
To begin
 with, it is free of charge and
people
 do not have to pay fees. More precisely, as soon as a person connects to the
Internet
, most of the resources they need will be available.
Moreover
, studying online materials requires no special time or
places
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. it means that they are accessible whenever and wherever
people
 want.
Also
, not having to carry things like books not only decreases the possibility of losing them but
also
 increases individuals' convenience.
On the other hand
, they are those who subscribe to the view that there are a lot of benefits in reading printed journals and books. They maintain that it can prevent eye diseases. As research findings confirm that excessive use of electronic devices
such
 as computers or mobile phones
are
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 harmful
for
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 individuals' health. Eye weakness,
for example
, is a prevalent result of
this
 usage. They
also
 assert that
this
 way of studying gives a sense of nostalgia which is
most
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people
keen
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 on due to the fact that it reminds them
their
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 childhood memories when data connections
was
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 not common as
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today
todays
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today
.
Consequently
, there will be some readers who prefer reading printed resources. In conclusion,
although
 emerging the
Internet
 has changed different aspects of
people
's lives
like
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rising their willingness to study online, I personally believe that it is not able to eliminate printed materials completely owing to
reasons
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the reasons
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 mentioned above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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