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What are causes and the negative effects of watching too much TV.

#effects #tv
Nowadays,
people
 from different countries are watching
TV
 too much extent. I think
this
 matter stems chiefly from their introverted disposition and age categories, but there are some issues. The reason why
people
 are watching
TV
 more than they used to mainly depends on their temperament.
For example
, the idle person is prone to getting sleep and watching
TV
 rather than engaging in other social and mental activities. Another reason appears to be the propensity of the old generation is watching
TV
 more than that of the young one.
For example
,
TV
 channels
such
 as news, and films are watched by the elder
people
 by holding a large number of remaining hours due to the fact that they have retirements which they can no longer move to job. There are some problems that have adverse effects on
people
's health as well as progress thereby allocating much
time
 behind the
TV
. One of those proves to be spending much
time
 watching
TV
 has a diverse detrimental effect because of detrimental
TV
 rays.
For instance
, the eyesight is diluted, even corrupted, in
people
 who spend a great deal of
time
 watching
TV
. Another problem that may be applied to especially children who are obsessed with watching
TV
 is that which draws them back from socializing like hanging up with peers. In conclusion, profuse consumption of
time
 watching
TV
 is mainly applied to those who have lazy moods as well as the elder generation;
nevertheless
,
this
 activity brings about mental or physical illness and socializing matters to
people
.
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