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Does renting a house have more advantages or disadvantages?

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Choosing a place to live in and whether to
rent
 it or own it is a big decision to make. Many
people
 prefer to own a
house
 rather than
living
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live
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 in a rented
apartment
 while others choose to do exactly the opposite. I believe that owning a
house
 has far more advantages than renting an
apartment
. To commence with,
people
 often
rent
 a
house
 because purchasing a property requires a great deal of money and the skyrocketing price in big cities makes it impossible for many to own a
house
. These
people
 naturally
rent
 an
apartment
. There are certain advantages to living in a rented
apartment
.
First
 of all, the person does not have to pay a huge sum of money at a time and does not need to pay housing taxes and bear the costs of maintenance.
Moreover
,
such
people
 can change
the
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their
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 living place based on the location of their workplace and children’s school. The renovation of the
apartment
 is the landlord’s responsibility and the tenants do not need to worry about it.
On the contrary
, owning a
house
 gives a sense of personal achievement that tenants cannot enjoy. A
house
 is a permanent asset and with time its price increases. The landlord can
rent
 the
house
 and
this
 can be a steady source of
earning
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earnings
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 for him.
Furthermore
, being the owner of a
house
 means there is no one over the shoulder to watch what someone is doing and no sudden notice for evacuation.
For instance
, we had to vacate our
apartment
 all of a sudden at least thrice until we purchased our own
house
 a decade earlier.
This
 is some sort of freedom that only
house
 owners enjoy.
Besides
, the owner can construct and design the
house
 the way he likes and enjoy open space,
garden
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a garden
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, and other facilities in the
house
. To conclude, renting a flat has some benefits but the overall freedom and monetary compensations
house
 owners enjoy are far
significant
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more significant
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, and
this
 is why every tenant dreams to own a
house
 someday.
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