Some people think that young people should folow tradtions of the society, while other people think that young people should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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believe that
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ought to go after
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the culture
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of the community, on the
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contrary
some people claim that
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must be at liberty to act as single. Before giving my opinion
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would like to look after both
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aspects. Discussing the
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view the foremost one is that, customs bind teenagers with the aura and identity of the society. It will uphold the social connection.
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, in order to preserve
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it is mandatory to follow them. If children do not
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adopt
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the cultural knowledge after a matter of
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it will fade and get extinct
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the modern era.
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,
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of
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traditional values teaches us to respect our elders which ultimately leads to
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bond between families and that
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enhance the growth of
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civilization
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period of
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every person
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freedom and
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the right
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to do whatever they like.
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is because if they have their own choices they can be more creative.
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, some
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myth
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myths
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are better if they change or can be avoided. To
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illustrate
this
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, in previous
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time
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women were forced to marry
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in
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early age and were stopped from
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the study
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study
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further
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. After
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age
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they have to do household chores only. But now as the
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is changing people are neglecting
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kind of
customes
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customers
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,
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women
womens
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are living their life on their terms.
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is a major
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the development of
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the country
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. To conclude, in my
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to follow
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customs
custom
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the inheritance
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of traditions from older to younger is very important. But
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living life on own terms is
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essential. So
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believe customs ought to be
follow
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but
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should not be forced on
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the youngster
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youngster
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youngsters
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and not be an obstacle
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to
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the growth of younger ones.
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