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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
In
this
 era of business and commerce, people's demand has skyrocketed.
Consequently
, the producer and suppliers have come up with various types of products for the consumers. A large number of people think that when anyone decides to buy a product, he or she
are
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 presented with a large number of options to choose from. Arguments championing
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 statement will be presented in the following. In
this
 era of
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technological
tchnological
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technological
 development,
a
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great communication between the consumers and the producers has been established and it has made
easy
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it easy
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 for the producers to know more about the demands of various
customers
. Taking into consideration the diverse choices of the
customers
, the big companies have come up with a huge number of options for the
customers
.
For example
, if someone wants to buy a smartphone he can look
up
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in
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 the internet and will eventually fall into a paradox because
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at least
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at least
 ten types of smartphones having the same qualities will be presented.
As a result
, it will become extremely hard for that person to choose.
Additionally
, if we go
for
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shopping at a cloth store, we will be washed up by a huge wave of
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different
differnet
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different
 types of clothes. The scenario is more or less the same in all the other fields. Even in the matter of career choice people are presented with large numbers of options. The probable reason behind
this
 could be that, due to facing difficulties many
customers
 will buy more products
that
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than
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 they really
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intended
intented
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intended
 to buy earlier and the pockets of the business owners will be filled.
Therefore
, the business owner fills up their stores with a vast amount of products. In conclusion, considering the aforementioned arguments anyone can have a proper idea about the current situation which indicates that, in the present
times
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everyone
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are
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 always offered too many choices and becomes confused
on
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along
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 the way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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