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The cost of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries?

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Airfares are on the decrease, as there are many airlines to cater to the needs of passengers and
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 is becoming cheaper than some other modes of conveyance in some areas where
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travel
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 extensively.
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 encourages more and more
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 to prefer
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 to other sorts of transport.
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 when flights become affordable to many. On the positive side, an important advantage of decreasing airfares is that it will boost
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, the largest provider of employment in the world. Directly and indirectly,
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, which comprises airlines, airports, hotels and
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 departments, creates employment for millions. Visiting different places will make
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 more broad-minded
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 since
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 itself is education. By undertaking travels,
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 become well-informed about different cultures and the world outside. It will help in reducing culture shock; it will pave the way for the development of
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international culture and it ease tension among nations. On the other side, an increase in
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 will lead to both
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 and noise pollution. A single flight produces more pollution than a car does in several years. Despite its merits,
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 will become a major source of overcrowding and pollution. The presence of a large number of strangers
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 a place will lead to the growth of crimes. Another example is the rise in international terrorism. The need to construct more airports necessitates the acquisition of more la
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