Write about the following topic: Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, there are so many
issues
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in the
environment
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sector which are threatening our daily lives. Among those
issues
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, it includes the extinction of some of the
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plants
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and
animals
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species
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and that our global ecosystem is threatened by man-made
pollution
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and climate change.
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some say that the decrease of
plants
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and animal
species
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is the major issue, I believe that there are more important environmental problems. Providing the environmental problems that we have right now
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as
pollution
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and deforestation will show in
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essay along with my opinion. Our
environment
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is now facing some major
issues
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in the following ways.
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of all, plastic
pollution
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becomes a big threat to every country.
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, since most of the country
overuse
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plastic and
plastic related
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plastic-related
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products too much, it destroys nature by being in the sea and soil
over
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thousands of years without destruction.
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, deforestation takes place in most of the country, which leads to
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imbalance
of
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in
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our
environment
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. In illustration of
this
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, the governments and companies cut down the trees from the forest to expand the city and agriculture so that it cannot provide the rain and the drought comes
in
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. It is
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agreeable that some animals and
plants
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are decreasing and coming to the end in our world. It is due to the people’s hunting habits and the effect of environmental problems, which
causes
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our natural imbalance.
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, when the rhino
species
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were rare in Africa a few years ago, the coexisted ecosystems depending on the rhinos
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as agriculture started to break down.
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, they should be preserved to maintain the balance of nature. According to the
above mentioned
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examples, I strongly believe that our
environment
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is threatened by major
issues
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like
pollution
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and deforestation rather than the loss of some
species
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of
plants
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and animals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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