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Some people like to try new new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that humans have varying personalities. Some
people
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 prefer to remain in their
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zone
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, while others are keen on exploring new stuff. In my opinion, trying something new allows
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 to learn
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 they haven't experienced before. There are several reasons why some likes to remain within their
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.
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, they like to be part of a routine because they found out that doing
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 they are used to always results in a positive outcome.
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, my friend usually selects the same meal in the restaurant. He made it a part of his routine because he knew the meal would always be good.
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, they might feel risks when trying new
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 and are afraid to venture out into the unknown.
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,
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 who remain in their
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zone
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 often fail to understand that trying new
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 will allow them to compare and make better decisions.
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,
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 who like to explore new food or experience new places want to get out of their
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zone
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. They like to bring variations into their life and aren't afraid of the outcome.
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, some
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 love to try a different meal each time and experience the variety in flavour. As
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, they can compare which meals are better. I think
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 should experience new
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 and destinations because it will allow a person to have a different perspective of the world. It can help them to understand other cultures and provide them with valuable knowledge. In conclusion, some
people
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 remain in their
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zone
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 because they are afraid of trying new
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 or places;
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, discovering new
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 will help them grow. In my opinion, I feel that it is better to explore new
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 than to do the same stuff you already know.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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