When a country develops its technology; the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Overall, I disagree with the opinion expressed. I would like
to begin
by pointing out that ‘traditional skills and
ways
of
life’
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are not automatically of one country, but of a culture or community. In many
ways
, the history of civilisation is the history of
technology
: from the discovery of fire to the invention of the wheel to the development of the Internet, we have been moving on from previous
ways
of doing things. Some technologies,
such
as weapons of mass destruction, are of negative impact. Others,
such
as medical advances, positively help people to live better or longer, and so very much help traditional
ways
of life. Surely, few people would seek to preserve
such
traditional
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as living in caves! Interestingly,
technology
can positively contribute to the keeping alive of traditional skills and
ways
of life.
For example
, the populations of some islands are too small to have normal schools. Rather than breaking up families by sending children to the mainland, education authorities have been able to use the Internet to deliver schooling online.
In addition
, the Internet, and modern refrigeration techniques, are being used to keep alive the traditional skills of producing salmon; it can now be ordered from, and delivered
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, anywhere in the world. In conclusion, without suggesting that all
technology
is necessarily good, I think it is by no means ‘ pointless’, in any way, to try to keep traditions alive with
technology
. We should not ignore
technology
, because it can be our friend and support our way of life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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