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The unlimited use of cars may cause many problems.What are the problems ? In oder to reduce the problems should discourage people to use cars ?

#cars #oder #people
The charts illustrate how
many
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much
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percentage
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percentages
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 will be changed in
energy
capacity
 in 2040 compared to 2015. Overall,
energy
capacity
 in gigawatts
show
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shows
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 a rise between 2015 and 2040. Fossil, Nuclear, and other renewables see downward trends, whereas wind and solar exhibit upward trends. It is witnessed that
expected
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the expected
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 fossil will decrease by 20 per cent from 64% to 44%, while
this
 proportion have taken the lead by 2040.
Next
 came other renewables, which will be a slight fall from 23% in 2015 to just over
fifth
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a fifth
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 of all
energy
capacity
 in 2040. It is
also
 worth noting that solar
sees
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 the greatest differences in the proportion of
energy
capacity
 in GW, which was 2 per cent in 2015, yet the percentage with the predictions will increase nine times to 18% in 2040.
In addition
, the proportion of wind will grow well over two times
next
 25 years, which
is
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from 5% to 12 %;
however
, nuclear will take the
last
 place at 6% in 2015 to 1 in 20 of
energy
capacity
 in GW in 2040.
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