It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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is thought by some to be necessary for
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, both in their professional and personal lives. While there are both
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and disadvantages associated with
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topic, I believe that the positive aspects take precedence over the drawbacks. On the one hand, there are
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of
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to individuals taking
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First
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of all,
people
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who take
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are more likely to become successful, because they have more opportunities.
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ought to expose themselves to the likelihood of failure
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since the chance of succeeding without doing so is minimal.
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to that, they will not have to regret
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in life. Many ask themselves how things would have changed if they had done something, and the fact that they have taken the risk will keep their mind free of
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thoughts.
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, there are
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certain negative aspects that come with
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action. The risk of failure is inevitable, and it can sometimes be very severe. There is no way for
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to ensure that everything will go
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their plan, and they have to accept the fact that things will not always be in their
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, they might feel more uncomfortable and have more stress in their
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, because they have to constantly worry about a lot of things.
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, I believe that these issues pose a minor threat to the
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, and they are actually an essential part of
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. In conclusion,
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there are a few disadvantages
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individual taking
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, there are a plethora of
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that outweigh the negative aspects. Individuals should take
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in order to become successful.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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