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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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The
classes
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Internet
Inernet
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Internet
has
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 replaced those of
colleges
 year by year. Some people say that
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 on
Internet
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is
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 useful as they do not need to go to
colleges
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college
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, whereas others believe that learning
in
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 university is essential.
Firstly
, one of the advantages to take
classes
 online is that
students
 can cut down the
time
 to commute to their
colleges
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 and
then
 can spend that
time
to
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 a lot of things,
such
 as their assignments
part-times
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part-time
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 and hobbies. Focusing on the assignments, the
colleges
 can give more tasks to
students
 due to reduce commuting
time
, which may lead to improving
student's
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 growth.
In addition
, considering
about
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hobbies,
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the
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student can expand their network of contacts by meeting and interacting with people they would not be involved with at
colleges
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, which may have a positive effect on their
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career
carrier
carrer
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career
.
However
, there are some benefits
about
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 studying at university.
Students
typicall
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typically
 can learn not only academics but
also
 a lot of skills they can not learn online, including
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the relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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 with friends,
time
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and time
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 management. Above all, the period of college
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life
lifes
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life
are
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 the best
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opportunity
opprtunity
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opportunity
 for
students
 to acquire these skills because they are essential to
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 in society and success
their
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 carrier. In my opinion, both
classes
 based on
Internet
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the Internet
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 and universities have each advantage, which means that the options depend on people and what they have as the top
of
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apply
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priority.
Furthermore
, I believe that it is
also
 important that more and more
colleges
 offer a wide range of
classes
 more
flexibily
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flexibility
.
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