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You bought a new HD television last week. At first it seemed to work perfectly but after a few hours a line appeared accross the TV and the sound seemed a little strange. You cannot take the TV back to the shop so you devide to write to them. Write a letter of complaint to the shop. In your letter: - give them the background information - described the problem - ask them to resolve the issue.

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Dear Shop Manager, Hope you are doing well, I am Sowmya Madhavan. I recently purchased an HD television from your store
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 week, exactly on the date of April 1 and my receipt number is "AW12345". I would like to let you know that am facing an issue with the product. One of my key concerns is, that when I switch on the TV, for a couple of hours it works fine , after that multiple lines show up all over the screen. To brief the view ,the lines are in rainbow colour and the back screen becomes black-out. Adding to it , the lines are more visible in nature and not in a lighter shade. I request your team
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resolve
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 issue by replacing it with a new product by picking it up from my home or sending a professional repair person to fix the issue by changing the motherboard of the HD television.
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 you in advance for helping me. Yours faithfully, Sowmya Madhavan

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Consider providing more detail about when exactly the problem started occurring
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea; the description of the problem could be clearer.
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Ensure consistent use of past tense when discussing past events.
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The letter is polite and maintains a suitable writing tone throughout.
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The request for resolution is clear and specific, demonstrating good communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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