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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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The
classes
 based on the Internet have replaced those of colleges year by year. Some people say that
classes
 on the Internet are useful as they do not need to go to
college
, whereas others believe that learning at university is essential.
Firstly
, one of the advantages to take
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class
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 online is that
students
 can cut down the
time
 to commute to their
college
 and
then
 can spend that
time
 on a lot of things,
such
 as their assignments, part-
time
 and hobbies. Focusing on the assignments, the colleges can give more tasks to
students
 due to reduce commuting
time
, which may lead to improving
students
’ growth.
In addition
, considering hobbies,
students
 can expand their network of contacts by meeting and interacting with people they would not be involved with at
college
, which may have a positive effect on their career.
However
, these are some benefits to studying at university.
Students
 typically can learn not only academics but
also
 a lot of skills they can not learn online, including relationships with friends and
time
 management. Above all, the period of
college
 life is the best opportunity for
students
 to acquire these skills because they are essential to participating in society and success in their
career
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. In my opinion, both
classes
 on the Internet and universities have each advantage, which means that the opinions depend on people and what they have as the top priority.
Furthermore
, I believe that it is
also
 important that more and more colleges offer a wide range of
classes
more
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 flexibility.
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