You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter • describe what you enjoyed about the course • say how much cooking you've done since the course • suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Madam, I received your letter, and I am delighted to give my unbiased feedback on the cookery

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which I attended two months ago. I would like to tell you about the part I enjoyed the most during the

course

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the technique of marinating chicken and other meat products. There was

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subtle information we were given by the tutor which

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been proven significant to cook delicious food. I have been cooking all daily meals in my house as soon as I completed

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some restaurants

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part-time and they really appreciate my cooking skill,

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they want to make a contract with me, but I have not thought about it because

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happy to cook for my family. I would like to suggest you

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new cooking courses from different cuisines

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as Mexican, Chines, Thai, etc. You probably know that these days Chinese foods are very popular amongst many so, I believe that you should involve Chinese cookery class in your upcoming curriculum. I am so

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that you ask for my feedback about the classes. I am so

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with the

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. Yours sincerely, Pradip Kumar

Submitted by pradipk.makwana on Mon Aug 29 2022

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 9.0

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198 words

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