You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter: ● say how you feel about his/her performance ● give details of your music-related activities ● explain how you would like him/her to help you with your music-related activities

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Dear James, I am Pradip Kumar, and I am a big fan of you and your amazing

music

. I attended your

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concert, which was held in North Park,

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needless to say that it was one of the best performances I have ever enjoyed. Your performance was

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top notch

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and astonishing. I would like to brief you about myself that I am

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small scale

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music

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director. I have been working for many adverts

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for many years. I have produced approximately 600-650 advertising background

music

and melodies. These days I am working on Pop

music

too and some of my collection I have enclosed to

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letter for your reference. I am seeking

for

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help to give me a breakthrough in the

music

industry so I would be grateful if you could provide me

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I can contact and show my collection to get some

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production work. Thank you for your consideration and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Pradip Kumar

Submitted by pradipk.makwana on Mon Aug 29 2022

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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7 paragraphs

175 words

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