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Some people view conflict between teenagers and parents as a necessary part of growing up, while others view it as something negative which should be avoided. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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From earlier days to the present day, fights and
conflicts
 among
parents
 are common. Some communities believe that
parents
 should avoid
conflicts
 among them in front of their offspring because
this
 may have a negative
impact
 on them while some others argue with
this
 matter and
then
 say
that is
 a part of everybody's
life
 through which offsprings become adults. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter.
To begin
 with, there are some people, who try to avoid
conflicts
 themselves because they don't want to
impact
 their
children
 negatively. With these problems between their
parents
,
children
 will get disturbed and will not focus on their education. People should try to avoid
conflicts
 from their past experiences.
For instance
, My
parents
 avoid their
conflicts
 because they try to avoid the mistakes done by my grandparents. In
this
 way, it is good to decline problems and give full support to
children
.
Then
 there will be no negative
impact
 on
children
. On the other side, Some other communities believe that
conflicts
 are part of everybody's
life
.
Children
 will not get any experience from their past if there are no
conflicts
. Meanwhile,
children
 will stay with their
parents
 and
conflicts
 between
parents
 are unavoidable.
For instance
, A child, who is staying with his/her
parents
then
 he/she will see some
conflicts
 between his/her
parents
 which are not avoidable. By seeing these problems among their
parents
,
children
 will try to avoid
this
 stage in their
life
.
For example
, My brother always tries to avoid
conflicts
 among family members because he had a great experience in his past
life
. To sum up, In my view, I support the latter statement because, Nowadays,
children
 are having a great
impact
 due to
conflicts
 between their
parents
. They are feeling stressed and not able to focus on their studies.I think it is better to decline
conflicts
 in front of their
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • maturing
  • facilitates
  • independence
  • fosters
  • problem-solving skills
  • personal values
  • beliefs
  • potentially harmful
  • persistent misunderstandings
  • parent-child relationship
  • source of stress
  • anxiety
  • constructive conflict
  • managed
  • communication skills
  • fosters growth
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