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some people say that advetising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things . others people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it . discuss both the views and give your opinion?

#people #attention
Have people become prudent enough to ignore
advetisements
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advertisements
, or do they still sell? Despite the assumption that they build brand value, advertising gets little attention from
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today's
todays
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 audiences, who are aware of marketing strategies and are used to the adverts. Advertisements, according to
the
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one school of thought, boost the
brand
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 reputation .
This
 is because in the past , via celebrity endorsements or by
repetadly
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repeatedly
 displaying
same
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 material to
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viewers
viewrs
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viewers
, a lasting image used to be created in potential
buyer
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buyers
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 minds,
consequently
, similar acts are still considered to make customers willing to pay for marketed items.
However
, the promotional schemes have been exposed to the public.
Firstly
, people
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know
knoe
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know
 that special pricing tactics,
such
 as offering things for 99 rupees
instead
 of 100 , are intended to result in insignificant differences
to
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 the costs.
Secondly
, they have understood that celebrities are paid for items , and occasionally false claims about the uses of the product are made.
Therefore
 , people are no longer becoming a fool from
such
 announcements.
Besides
 the rise in knowledge about the above methods, the public has been habituated.Since the present generation watches several advertisements daily , they have ceased to them, thereby rendering the marketing message ineffective.
For instance
, had my friend not seen the posts of a famous food company on
instagram
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 every few hours, he would have continued to be enticed by the same. To recapitulate, advertisements are considered to enhance the
products
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product's
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 image by some, contrarily, they are no longer able to capture the
viewers
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viewer's
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 attention as current clients are well versed with the methodologies used and see nothing unique in these.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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