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• Some students found some subjects such as mathematics, philosophy are difficult, so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A certain group of people consider making
subjects
such
 as
mathematics
 and philosophy optional. I totally disagree with that opinion as these
subjects
 are mandatory to survive in
this
 modern world. Here are some arguments to support my thesis.
Firstly
, some of the critical
subjects
 should be made mandatory.
For example
,
mathematics
 is a very critical subject and it must be mainly focused on and
children
 are taught to become an expert as it is very important for the future of youngsters and their nations.
Children
 who are experts in
mathematics
 are expected to become financial leaders and handle the countries and leading technology economic status. On other hand, It is mandatory as our daily routine involves
mathematics
. In a day, we may need to perform calculations at least once a day.
In addition
 to that, to get an opportunity in many companies we need to clear the aptitude exams.
Moreover
, the world evolves around artificial intelligence and machine learning for which calculus is the main area of focus. In my opinion, at, school the
children
 must be taught all
subjects
 through which they can develop an idea and choose the course for higher education. To conclude, all the students may not be interested in all the
subjects
.
However
, learning that at a very younger age gives them the perspective to choose their career path.
In addition
, it helps them to survive in
this
 modern world. It is the responsibility of the educational institution to make sure the relevant knowledge reaches the
children
 which will support the growth of youngsters and the nation.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • balanced education
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