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Some people suggest that it is wrong to give money to beggars asking for money on the street, while others think that it is the right thing to do. Which point of view do you think is correct, and why?

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In
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 modern era, it's an irony that we still see few people on the roads or on the streets begging for
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 for their livelihood. Some people believe that it is wrong to give
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 to
beggars
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, who ask for
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 for their food or for their living, while some think that
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 is the right thing to do. In my opinion, it is wrong to give
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 to
beggars
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 and I think
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way
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 for two reasons, which I will explore in
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 with, I would like to say that giving
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 to
beggars
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 is not a good solution
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 their problems,
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, pragmatically there are other ways to help them,
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 as by educating them, by giving them food, or clothes. Since
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 it is not possible to help one and all in the mentioned suggested
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, we can take care of at least one person by all our plausible means.
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, nowadays there are various NGOs which are working for the better life of the needy one, we should guide them to follow
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, I feel that the right
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 to help
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 is to teach them and to aid in knowing that, they can
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 do some
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 to earn their livelihood.
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, if we keep giving them
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,
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this
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 will become their habit and they will make a wrong perception in their mind about getting
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 from others without doing any
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, which instigate them towards a wrong
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 of living.
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, it is better to offer them some
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,
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, they will know the value of
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 when they earn it with their own hard
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. In conclusion, I believe that giving
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 to
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 when they ask for it, is the wrong
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 to help them.
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, we should help in other ways, as mentioned in the above paragraphs, which will enhance their life in a better
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.
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