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Plastic and plastic material is bad for the environment. What will it cause? How can government and individual solve it

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Nowadays, it is becoming increasingly worrisome, the improper disposal of plastic waste into the ecosystem. Plastic pollution is a threat to the environment because of its poor degradation nature.
However
, it is reported to have been responsible for the death of aquatic animals and
also
 public health issues in humans.
Moreover
, authorities, citizens and residents at large have significant roles in addressing
this
 menace by establishing recycling centres and formulating robust policies to stimulate proper collection and disposal.
This
 essay will
further
 explain with adequate examples the effect and approach to tackling the problem.
First
 of all, these substances on the surface of the ocean will endanger the life of wildlife.
For instance
, numerous wastes at the surface of the aquatic zone will prevent oxygen availability to the aquatic organisms,
subsequently
 leading to hypoxia,
thus
 death.
Furthermore
, the poor degradation level of these materials in the ecosystem will cause disease of public health issues in humans.
For example
, many years of deposition of these products into the surroundings will lead to releasing of toxic chemicals which will eventually harm man
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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