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School and university students learn lessons far better from their teachers than from other resources, such as the internet and television. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#school #university #students #lessons #teachers #resources #internet #television
We are in the era of
computer
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the computer
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 age, where lots of knowledge are acquired. With
this
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 I
be
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 discussing the merits of children gaining more learning skills than their tutors.
To begin
 with, Parents
has
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 to contribute to
this
 fact in the sense that, they buy them a lot of gadgets which
enables
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 these children to the exposure of learning from the internet.
For instance
, a child of one year already
have
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 the experience of answering a call or even
unlock
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 a passworded phone due to the that the child plays constantly with gadgets.
In addition
, they
also
 learn from watching television especially from watching
of
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cartoons,
it
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broading
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broadening
broaden
 their understanding and makes the fast
in
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learning. In conclusion, parents
plays
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part
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the part
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 of the
roles
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 by helping the juvenile understand their learning skills.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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