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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activity that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #leisure #time #activity #mind #word #puzzles #rest
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The given maps compare the landscape of an
island
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, before and after the construction of several amenities and facilities. Overall, it is clear that a number of facilities have been added, and a vehicle track was set up around the features.
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, a swimming zone was designated near the beach for tourists to swim. Looking
first
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 at the middle and right side of the
island
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, several changes can be seen. In the central area, a restaurant and a reception have been constructed, where they were surrounded by the vehicle's tracks. To the south of the reception, a pier was built at the shore of the
island
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 for tourists to access the facilities by boat. As for the right side, a number of accommodations were constructed and all were linked by the footpath. Moving onto the left side of the
island
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, another accommodation area was set up and was connected to the beach and reception by footpath. In regard to the beach, a swimming zone was designated on the outskirts of it, providing a safe area for tourists to enjoy swimming.
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