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The diagram shows the process by which honey is produced by
bees
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, which can be divided into seven consecutive stages. The
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 step is that
bees
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 get out of the hive where they live.
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, after looking for a place where are plenty of flowers, the
bees
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 will stay on the flowers and start collecting
sweet
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the sweet
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 liquid in them. After that, the
bees
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 fly back to their container, bring nectar back and save it into cells, which are lots of cells in a hive.
 In the
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 stage,
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 is worth noting that the
bees
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 lie on the cells and move their wings rapidly. Before honey is produced by them, the
bees
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 will through the speed of moving their wind in order to manufacture wind for evaporation, which means it helps water in nectar change to gas. In the
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 step, after all of the processes mentioned above are done, the honey will be completely made.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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