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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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collective knowledge
security risk
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competitive advantage
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sensitive technology
ethical guidelines
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peer-review processes
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some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies that happen inside houses. What do you think is the best thing a person can do to ensure his/her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support.

In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

Doctors recommend that older people should excersice regularly.However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?