Nowadays, many people prefer to seek medical advice on the Internet instead of seeing a qualified doctor. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative development?

In
this
contemporary period, a large number of people seek medical
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on the
internet
instead
of making a personal visit to a professional health care provider. There are acceptable reasons for
this
trend.
However
, I believe that there are more drawbacks than it's merit.
Firstly
, getting
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advice
on the
internet
is so much easier and more convenient. With the continuing innovation
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digitalization, it has immensely benefited individuals to search
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on the
internet
.
For instance
, when a
person
gets sick, he would have to use only his mobile and search the web
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possible remedies he can apply to treat his condition.
As a result
, the
person
will no longer have to go in
person
to a medical doctor
thus
reducing the time for queuing at the hospital or clinics which
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sometimes
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takes a lot of time before you can be
finally
seen by a doctor.
Secondly
, the
internet
is so much
free
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that any
person
seeking
for
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medical
advice
will not have to pay a hefty amount of money for professional fees.
This
would certainly reduce their expenses and can be spent on more important stuff like food, water and tuition.
However
, I personally believe that
this
trend is a negative development.
For example
, if the
persons
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already in trouble experiencing an emergency situation,
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he still
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to go online and check for his disease rather than going to the emergency department for the proper treatment.
This
would negatively affect the
person
because
instead
of being cured in a shorter period of time, it might result
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a more debilitating illness or problem in the future. In conclusion, albeit the benefits one gets just searching the
internet
and seeking medical
advice
, I think it is better to seek
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professional
advice
and pay
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visit
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for
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qualified professionals rather than putting yourself in so much danger.
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